Star,
Feverish, Brilliant,
Burning, Flickering, Dying,
Radiant glow of heat,
Sun.
This is a cinquain. Cinquain poetry has 5 lines. Line 1 is one word (the title), line 2 is two words that describe the title, line 3 is three words that tell the action, line 4 is four words that express the feeling, and line 5 is one word that recalls the title. I used personfication in line 2 with the word "feverish" because it makes the stars feel more personal and human, and because it describes the heat stars give off. The words in line 3 "burning, flickering, dying" is describing the lifespan of a star. I used alliteration in "burning" and "brilliant", and also in "feverish" and "flickering". There is imagery throughout the whole cinquain, and this poem fits into my theme because it shows the nature of stars.
I liked your use of personification in line 2. Making the star seem like a human and personal as you are comfertable with it in the sky. Seeing it there all the time and knowing that you can look up to find it watching over you. Great work!
ReplyDeleteCinquains are always fun to read and I thought you did a really good job with this one! The adjectives in line 2, as well as the verbs in line 3 that personify the star, were great word choices, giving strength to the poem.
ReplyDeleteI like how you fit so many interesting literary devices in such a short poem. The 3 "ing" words instead of being boring synonymns, I noticed that "burning, Flickering, Dying" are describing the life of the sun, from most radiant to decline. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteI really like the contrast you create between the sun and the star, and how the words in the third line can describe either the sun or the star. I also thought the 4th line was well written, and gave a clear impression of what you were getting at.
ReplyDeleteI found your transformation from star to Sun very interesting. After all, the Sun is a star. The adjectives that you used were not too complicated and not too simple/mediocre too! Good job!
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